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【说明文】2013“模拟赛场”第二期获奖作文②

说明文写作(Expository Writing)(10分)

Write a passage based on the chart below, which shows the influences of various factors on work performance in two age groups. You should summarize the features of the two groups and make comparisons. You should write about 500 words.

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张小平

The bar chart below mainly illustrates the different factors that affecting work performance chosen by the age group of 18 to 30 and the age group of 45 to 60. 

         To begin with, for the age group of 18 to 30, their work performance were mostly influenced by the chance for personal development. Relaxed working environment and promotion prospects at work force equally affected greatly that whether they would performed good or not.  A certain amount of attention were given to team spirit and job satisfaction by the youngsters. When it comes to the job security and respect from colleagues, however, the younger adults seemed attach less attention to them while working in their related positions. Their work environment seemed to affect least in their work performance, according to the chart.

        Additionally, when it comes to the people who were 45 to 60 years old, money, among all the factors, ranked on top of their lists. Middle-aged group's work performance could be influenced dramatically by the fact that whether they were surrounded by good team spirit or not. Competent boss could also help contributing to their excellent work performance. Yet the factors such as job security and work environment seemed barely influence their work efficiency and effectiveness.

         As is shown on the chart, we can get the information easily that younger age group prefer to focus on the potential chance for individual development rather than to own a good work environment , for they were young, energetic and ambitious.  Apparently the age group of 45 to 60 attached greatest significance on money. Who does not want a pleasant salary?  

         By comparing those two age groups, we can notice the striking differences. We can understand that the younger ones’ work performance were greatly affected by chances for personal development, whereas the middle aged group paid more attention to money. Standing at the earlier stage of their lives, the youngsters were vastly stimulated by the possible chances for their own progress. They expected relaxed working environment and were eager to get promotion in their future career paths. Youngsters were famous for their daring, adventurous characteristics so that they concentrated least on work environment. Nevertheless, for those who were 45 to 60 years old, as they getting older, they started to plan for their future retirement. Saving money seemed to be the most reassuring way to stabilize their plans. Moreover, people who are in this age group normally have families. Consequently, the need for money stirred them to work even harder to support their families.

         Besides, the demand of atmosphere at workforce differed in those two age groups. While the younger group was inclined to be wrapped in a relaxed working environment, the middle aged group behaved more tolerant towards intense pressure. As the older group worked for many years, they would have gained abundant work experience in their professional fields. So middle aged group were capable enough to handle high pressure and stress emerged at work. Thus their work performance were least influenced by the relaxed working environment and job security. However, for the youngsters who just stepped into a new territory of profession, they could panick easily under fierce competition.

         In spite of the huge age gap, there are some similarities in the two groups. Undoubtedly a good team spirit was helpful in gaining satisfied work performance in both groups. Regardless of age, cooperative spirit exerted great influence on employees’ daily performance.

         In conclusion, young adults prioritized personal development chances in their work force, whereas the older ones were mostly satisfied by financial awards. Therefore, companies and corporations should spare no effort to cater to employees’ demands based on different age group so that work efficiency would be improved significantly.